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Posted on 17 April, 2017 at 10:40

Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force as men are. 

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

by Ruzanna S. (obtained Overall Score 8.0 in IELTS General with 7.0 in Writing, December, 2017)


Some argue that only men should serve in the armed forces, while the others hold that females have equal rights with men to choose a military career. Agreeing with the latter view, this opinion will be supported in the essay.


To start with, the main aim of the armed forces is to hire capable individuals regardless their gender. Women who go to the army know the standards. They have to meet not only the fitness requirements but also specific military position needs. Females have proven their courage, ability and endurance under the most challenging conditions including combat situations. For example, during the Second World War the Soviet Union had over one million female soldiers who served effectively as snipers, machine gunners and tank crew members.


Moreover, it is possible to hire women to perform some duties in the army which do not require special physical abilities. Many females enter combat units in support roles such as intelligence gatherers, instructors, social workers, medical personnel and engineers. In fact, soldier’s abilities to maintain composure, apply logic, communicate clearly and solve problems in demanding environment are as important as physical ones.


Finally, owing to some personality traits of women, they can keep balance while crucial decisions are being made. Having diverse teams with different ideas and approaches to problem solving is important for being successful in military operations. When men and women cooperate in the army, issues are being worked on in a more peaceful and constructive manner.


In conclusion, it may be claimed that women should be permitted to serve in the military forces if they express the interest in it.

(265 words)

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